Chapter 7: Page 7
Hmmm anyone recognize these two? Next week brings us a scene change and a leap forward in time.
The semester starts for me tomorrow… wish me luck in surviving it!
Here is the 3rd of 3 holiday themed pictures – vote to see and read the description below!
During the winter months, Drae visit the wayfarers shrines dedicated to their clan’s ancestors, lighting candles and tying strips of silk to them with prayers or wishes for the new year written on them, or names of those who are being remembered. This is often done at night, and many a traveler’s tale involves these ghostly shrines and their “unknown” attendants, for the lighting of these shrines is highly secretive and often a duty of the youngest of a clan’s members.
So the backatory makes sense. :0
I kind of wonder what will happen when they all meet.
I am trying to keep following the various threads a little more interesting :D
Well nice to see them again, hmmm one of them he had better not kill or a certain dark elf will be hunting him… frog or bunney or radis…that might be his fate.
Good luck!
Also this may be a silly question, but the verse(s) at the beginning of this chapter, are they part of something larger or are they self contained? Just curious.
I wrote it for the comic, there were a few more lines that didn’t make the cut. I could always expand it as an extra or something ^_^
That would be REALLY cool.
So, uh, what if she didn’t have any brothers? Or if they were weak and sickly? Would he have to fight two loser-warriors or would the elder pick up other ones?
Oh, darn. I guess maybe I should reword it differently. The fact that the two best warriors also happen to be her brothers is more coincidence; he’d have had to face two of the best warriors for trespassing/if he wants to stick around anyway. Sometimes its hard to squeeze all that context into a scene though… Let me know what would help make that clearer!
Hmm, I see, it is hard… I suppose if “brothers of she who led you here” was on a different panel, to make it sound less important… Or, maybe, if the phrase was “*and* they are brothers of she who led you here” to make it clear it is a coincidence… Or if there was an extra panel with the lady, and she said something like “fight him, my brothers” (although that could be metaphorical brotherhood) Or if in a later page, she explained to the stranger that the two were also her brothers.
It makes sense that the stranger would have to fight two skilled warriors (I was kinda joking when I was talking about the hypothetical loser-warriors) but I still didn’t know if their culture was such that ALL men are strong (there could be a Spartan “kill all weaklings” culture) or if people from less skilled families have less privileges, so if she had weak brothers or no brothers at all, she wouldn’t be allowed to wander the forest anyways.
Nah, if one of them had led a pretty lady into the woods who was bearing steel, it would be the sister and the other brother to face them I think XD I might take out the reference to brothers there and just reveal it later. I just thought it would be a fun “aha” moment.
You know best how to do the thing! You could even leave this page as it is and then explain the context of the whole thing in detail later, because it would be interesting to learn more about these guys’ culture! :-)